By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, whether or not to execute offenders committing murder is a highly debatable topic. Opponents to capital punishment contend that taking one's life is a

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matter it is upon rules of law or not.

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, I partially agree with the latter statement. A Number of benefits are achieved if offenders of severe crimes are sentenced to death penalty.

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the overall sense of security rises which provides a basis for healthy nurture of children and the

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, by omitting a dangerous person, authorities could invest imprisonment costs in training citizens facing less trouble in the future. Since

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of keeping a person in prison for a lifetime almost equal the costs those of a citizen receiving education, it seems more logical to allocate the budget to those who can ultimately become productive for

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, down points. Sometimes wrong people are imprisoned because of police's inability to arrest the real offender,

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in some other cases, innocent people are set up to be captured for a number of reasons

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as taking revenge.

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, there have been numerous cases in which the murderer regrets their action and truly wants to compensate somehow. In

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cases, taking lives is intolerable and translated as a murder itself. To conclude, there is no fine line to divide criminals who deserve a death sentence from

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who do not. In my opinion, overall, execution allowed by law for criminals who are a threat to society is more beneficial.

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