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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

#rubbish #governments #amount
Increase
Suggestion
The increase
 in waste
generation
 has been a pressing issue around the globe.
This
 essay will discuss the cause for
rubble
 endemic, the rapid urbanization and give suggestions for its mitigation, by
multipronged
 approach by the governments of developed and developing countries. While the developing countries
have increasing
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are increasing
 urban population, the developed countries are already at the peak of urbanization. Both the situations result in
high
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higher
 consumption and
generation
 of the unusable bye products. The raise in the buying capacity of large populations in countries
such
 as India and
china
Suggestion
China
has resulted in
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has resulted in a generation
generation
 of single use plastics. Already the developed countries are exporting the single use waste across the globe, after reaching
limits
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the limits
 beyond their disposal capabilities.
This
 is the result of growing economic activity, which in turn resulted in
global increase
Suggestion
a global increase
 in urban population. Seldom, the
rubble
generation
 has been given enough attention compared to increasing their economic growth by the countries around
world
Suggestion
the world
. The administrations of the countries, which significantly contribute to the
rubble
generation
 in the world, need to take extensive actions through multiple approaches, to decrease it at the source.
This
 can be achieved by promoting biodegradable materials as packaging material. Wherever there is no possibility of using easily degradable materials, using it
multiples
Suggestion
multiple
 times or recycling of the trash generating materials should be adopted. Apart from making relevant laws for the suggested usage, necessary public awareness and strict law enforcement should be implemented for the desired results. In conclusion, the genuine intention of the governments of relatively bigger economies can result in minimizing the
rubble
 footprint on the globe. Though the major economies are in the race of becoming leaders in wealth
generation
, the resulting urban population should be guided and empowered by the local governments to mitigate the
rubble
generation
.

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