Some people think that hardworking and determination are the key factors for being successful in life. Other people feel that other factors are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are different

openions

a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty

opinions

for different people to get success in life. I strongly agree that hard working and determination are key factors for being successful,

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firstly i

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Firstly, I

firstly I

Firstly I

Firstly i

would like to mention that

with out

in absence of

without

out hard working no one can

achive

to gain with effort

achieve

achieved

their goal in life, when you are working on some

perticular

unique or specific to a person or thing or category

particular

assignemt

a duty that you are assigned to perform (especially in the armed forces)

assignment

, you have to understand the assignment and you have to plan the steps to

achive

to gain with effort

achieve

the target date, your work towards

plan

Suggestion

the plan

a plan

and execution must be 100% when want to reach the target

with in

internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of

within

mentioned date.

hard

Suggestion

Hard

work and determination are key factors when you are working on any project. When you put all efforts towards your target that will help you to

underatnd

know and comprehend the nature or meaning of

understand

more.

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However there

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However, there

are few other factors will

plays

Suggestion

play

a role in your success factor like perfection of the work you do, team your working, environment you are working and personal life issues

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

153 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

perseverance
skill development
overcoming obstacles
social connections
economic background
grit
entrepreneurs
existing connections
industries
career paths
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