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Some people think that hardworking and determination are the key factors for being successful in life. Other people feel that other factors are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are different
openions
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinions
 for different people to get success in life. I strongly agree that hard working and determination are key factors for being successful,
firstly i
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Firstly, I
firstly I
Firstly I
Firstly i
 would like to mention that
with out
in absence of
without
 out hard working no one can
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
achieved
 their goal in life, when you are working on some
perticular
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
assignemt
a duty that you are assigned to perform (especially in the armed forces)
assignment
, you have to understand the assignment and you have to plan the steps to
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
 the target date, your work towards
plan
Suggestion
the plan
a plan
 and execution must be 100% when want to reach the target
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 mentioned date.
hard
Suggestion
Hard
 work and determination are key factors when you are working on any project. When you put all efforts towards your target that will help you to
underatnd
know and comprehend the nature or meaning of
understand
 more.
However there
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However, there
 are few other factors will
plays
Suggestion
play
 a role in your success factor like perfection of the work you do, team your working, environment you are working and personal life issues
.
Accept space
.
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  • perseverance
  • skill development
  • overcoming obstacles
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • grit
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  • industries
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