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Nowadays, people of all ages from certain parts of the world spend most time at home rather than going outdoors. Discuss the reasons, is this negative or positive development?

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Nowadays have many people do not like to outgoing more than the past because of the factor
such
 as traffic, weather, people, internet, etc. The advantage of spending
time
 at home
such
 as convenient if you stay at home, you have everything and can do anything without other people or you will not contact people who are a bad habit and you do not have to worry about anyone else, so you will feel relax after work hard per day, but everything has 2 sides so the disadvantage of spending
time
 at home is maybe you will impatient, cannot wait for something long because you accustom to do anything alone and it can make you can not socialize.
However
, parents should be careful when children use electronic devices or use to spend
time
 together
such
 as watch movie online and management
time
 to go outside together.

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