Psychological illness may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or illness, nevertheless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society , however , is more accepting of those with physical than psychological illness or disabilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Psychological
illness
is a big
problem
in some societies. Some people
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that psychological
illness
may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or
illness
while others state that it is more accepting of those with
physical
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more physical
than psychology
illness
or disabilities. I will explain my both the views in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are many reasons of psychological
illness
may not be as physical disabilities or illnesses. The
first
and the foremost is psychological illnesses occur from
stress
. Nowadays,
mostly
Suggestion
most
people take
stress
due to their job
work
, financial problems and many more. So, people suffer from psychological
illness
and
this
disabilitis
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disability
disabilities
suffer
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suffers
from their own
way
.
For example
:
Accept space
:
people take
stress
due to their financial
problem
in their own
way
and
stuffer
undergo or be subjected to
suffer
from psychological problems.
On the other hand
, in
society mostly
Suggestion
society, most
society most
people is more accepting of those with physical because some people believe that physical fitness people is able to do any type of
work
and it easily
consontrate
make denser, stronger, or purer
concentrate
concentrated
in
Suggestion
on
their
work
than those people who suffer from psychological
illness
or disabilities.
In addition
to
this
, physical fit peoples handle the
problem
in
right
Suggestion
the right way
a right way
way
because they do not think negative thoughts in their mind a easily take
right
dicision
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
decisions
regarding to their
work
and
also
take
right
dicisions
the act of making up your mind about something
decisions
decision
regarding to their society and
also
give help to develop their nation.
For example
, healthy fitness person
is take
Suggestion
is taking
is taken
has taken
takes
right dicision
Suggestion
the right decision
right decision
right decisions
in any type of
work
and in
positive
Suggestion
a positive way
positive ways
way
. To conclude, psychological
illness
increase day by day because
number
Suggestion
a number
of people take
stress
Suggestion
the stress
. So, government
should be take
Suggestion
should take
should be taken
decision regarding to
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decision regarding
this
problem
and
also
give benefits to those people who suffer from psychological
illness
.
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