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Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Most of the countries have an important health issue, namely
obesity
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, commonly observed in financially stable countries. While most people feel that,
obesity
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 is an important issue in rich countries.
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, I feel that overweight is a global problem and below I would like to suggest a few solutions to overcome
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 problem.
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, I would recommend homemade
food
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 over fast
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. As we all know that, people are busy with their lives so they don't spend much time on cooking due to that, they often go to a fast-
food
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 restaurant (
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 as Mc Donald, Burger King, etc.).
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, If the individuals prepare
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 at their home for some period,
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 they will lose some body
weight
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. From a recent survey conducted by the New York Times, they came to know that 50 percent of people lost 8 lbs of
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 after the people started avoiding outside
food
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.
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, I believe one can reduce their
obesity
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 by following a good diet. Most people these days are either having high-calorie
food
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 or having soft drinks which have more sugar level. If people maintain a healthy diet
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 it will impact
weight
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 loss.
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, many of my friends now preferring vegan
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 over meat because they have less cholesterol and calories. To conclude, I feel that
obesity
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 is a global issue because many people are gaining
weight
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 in many countries. I would recommend them to follow these solutions like exercising, having homemade
food
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 and maintaining a proper diet to become fit.
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