You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter correct the information in the article expiain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing about your essay which was published on 5th October in your newspaper
according to
Tabriz
in south
of Iran. I would like to inform you that there was a mistake in Add an article
the south
this
article that you had written about Tabriz
. In your article
you mentioned that not only Add a comma
article,
Tabriz
has
Wrong verb form
have
a
warm weather during Remove the article
apply
a
year, but Correct article usage
the
also
it has polluted air. Hence
I want to give correct data which Tabriz
has a moderate and clear climate, and all of the people are enjoying that.
Adding that ,annually a lots
of tourists visit my home town these false informations can give them a sense of confusion.Correct the article-noun agreement
a lot
lots
Hence
, the wrong data will prevent them from travelling.
However
there are several measures that can be implemented to resolve Add a comma
However,
this
issue. For example
, you can make an amendment text which can be an alternative replacement for the last
text.
Thank you for your attention. Please feel free to contact me if you want more correct data about Tabriz
.
Yours sincerely,
Ali SaremiSubmitted by aksoysana on
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text organization
Structure your ideas more clearly by separating them into distinct paragraphs for each main point.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph addresses a single idea. For example, separate the discussion of weather and tourism into different paragraphs.
task response
Consider providing specific titles for incorrect information to enhance clarity and authority when correcting an error.
tone
Polite and respectful tone observed, suitable for formal correspondence.
format
Clear introduction and closing; addresses the editor directly and signs off with courteous regards.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite