some people think watching sports in one's free time is just waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this sentence ?

sport
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The sport
Sport
is
become
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becoming
very popular in mankind.
few
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Few
people believe watch sports
in
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at
leisure
time
is
waste
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a waste
of
time
.
l
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L
agree to see the
sport
is not waste of
time
.
Accept space
.
there
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There
are many
benefit
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benefits
in stressful life
,
Accept space
,
teach to people, but some negative effects to citizens.
To begin
with, there are many
benefit
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benefits
to watch sports.
Firstly
, people work very hard and live very stressful life, so it is important citizens take
few
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little
time
to watch
sport
.
moreover children
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Moreover, children
Moreover children
teach
lost
a large number or amount
lots
of through the watch
sport
to how to play every
sport
.
ln
Suggestion
Ln
addition
,
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,
sports always entertainment to people, so if people free
time
to watch
sport
event is not
waste
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a waste
of
time
.
on
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On
the other hand, some many negative to watch
sport
.
Accept space
.
First
of all, few people watch
in
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at
leisure
time which
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time, which
became regular,
si
it not do other important work
.
Accept space
.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
watch sports channel by the T.V. , so some side effects to people eye. In conclusion, l would strongly recommend to watch
sport
in free
time
is not harmful.
sport
Suggestion
Sport
provided enjoy to people in stressful life and education to
sport
related
,
Accept space
,
but few harmful
imfact
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impacts
impact
to people work and eye.

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