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Band 2.5

some people think watching sports in one's free time is just waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this sentence ?

#people #sports #time #waste #sentence
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sport
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The sport
Sport
 is
become
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becoming
 very popular in mankind.
few
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Few
 people believe watch sports
in
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at
 leisure
time
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 is
waste
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a waste
 of
time
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l
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L
 agree to see the
sport
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 is not waste of
time
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.
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.
there
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There
 are many
benefit
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benefits
 in stressful life
,
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,
 teach to people, but some negative effects to citizens.
To begin
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 with, there are many
benefit
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benefits
 to watch sports.
Firstly
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, people work very hard and live very stressful life, so it is important citizens take
few
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little
time
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 to watch
sport
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.
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moreover children
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Moreover, children
Moreover children
 teach
lost
a large number or amount
lots
 of through the watch
sport
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 to how to play every
sport
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.
ln
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Ln
 addition
,
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,
 sports always entertainment to people, so if people free
time
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 to watch
sport
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 event is not
waste
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a waste
 of
time
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.
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on
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On
 the other hand, some many negative to watch
sport
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.
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.
First
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 of all, few people watch
in
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at
 leisure
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time which
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time, which
 became regular,
si
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 it not do other important work
.
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.
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secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
,
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,
 watch sports channel by the T.V. , so some side effects to people eye. In conclusion, l would strongly recommend to watch
sport
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 in free
time
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 is not harmful.
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sport
Suggestion
Sport
 provided enjoy to people in stressful life and education to
sport
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 related
,
Accept space
,
 but few harmful
imfact
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impacts
impact
 to people work and eye.

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