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Globalisation has both advantages and disadvantages. Discuss both and give your opinion.

#globalisation
Due to the advancement of the technology and transportation, the whole world has turned into a global village. While some think that it has more advantages, others opine that
this
development
 has more drawbacks.
This
 essay will discuss both views of the statement,
however
, I believe that the
globalization
 is a positive
development
.
First
 of all, the main advantage of the
globalization
 is an expansion of the economies of the nations.
This
 is due to the
development
 of trade, namely an export and import of the products between the countries without any barriers. The wheat and maize,
for example
, send from India to all over the world.
Secondly
, it increases the migration of people and dissemination or scattering of information among the population of human.
In other words
, people not only move from one country to an another, but
also
 garner the knowledge of the different cultures.
Therefore
, the
globalization
 makes the countries financially rich and allow people to live anywhere they want.
On the other hand
, the one main drawback of the
globalization
 is the disappearance of the different cultures and the traditions. Countries are becoming more and more similar and people of the distinct regions adopt a similar culture.
For example
, in India, most of the people prefer to wear the western or modern clothes
instead
 of their own traditional ones. So,
this
development
 directly affects the variety of the cultures of different countries.
Moreover
, it
also
 affects the tourism industry because of similarity between the nations. In conclusion,
although
 the globalisation has a negative impact on the cultures, I believe that it has more positives,
such
 as an economic growth and spread the population in different parts of the world.
Submitted by jhldeep on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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