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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that both the wealthy and the less privileged students have difficulty getting into universities. I do not quite agree with
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 view. In my opinion, children from affluent families can easily get admitted to top universities;
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, it is quite difficult for poor students.
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 with, being born into a rich family is a boon. Rich kids have access to almost everything, including a college seat. In every private institution, there are seats reserved for students willing to pay an enormous capitation fee. It does not matter whether they have good grades or not.
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, even if a student does not excel in academics, they still have the option of getting admission to any course of their choice if they are willing to pay a huge admission fee.
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 is not possible for a student coming from a poor background. Another point to consider is that parents of students coming from rich families have influential contacts.
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, they are connected to college trustees and raise funds for events. With recommendations from
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 top people, they can easily get admission for their children in any institution of their choice.
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, young people with no money or influence have to strive hard to get scholarships so that they can continue their studies. If they fail to win a scholarship their dream of pursuing higher education is shattered. Statistics reveal that poor students are more likely to drop out of college than rich students because of their inability to pay the tuition fee. To sum up, it is easier for a child to get admitted to a university provided that he has enough money or influence.
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, it is quite difficult for students coming from non-affluent families because they have neither money nor people willing to recommend them for a seat.

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