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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Decent, good quality public
transportation
 services are a necessity in any country. Not everyone is able to afford his own
transportation
; a sound network of
variety
Suggestion
a variety
the variety
 of public
transport
 should be available to sustain the economy by ensuring the availability of the workforce. Without public
transportation
 the poor will be left stranded, with long distance travel out of their reach. Cities which are suffering from
high level
Suggestion
high levels
a high level
 of pollution, suffocating gases and smog can benefit greatly from improvement of public
transport
. Lower cost and high quality should
also
 attract those who do not use these services because of their poor quality. Public
transport
Accept comma addition
transport, although
although
 provides convenience to the citizens of the country
however
 is not suitable for everyone.
For instance
 the elderly and the sick may find it difficult to reach and wait at the bus stops or rail stations. Many orthodox religious women may prefer private
transport
 over public
transportation
. All kinds of people use these
transportation
 and stations and bus stops could be rife with criminal activities. The taxation of car owners will result in fewer ownership of vehicles; even those who own their own vehicles because of any
such
 necessity will no longer be able to afford them. The government should be quite selective in
taxing car
Suggestion
taxes, car
taxes car
 owners, those who own them out of sheer necessity should be immune to the levy of
such
 tax. Other ways to deal with the issue of traffic congestion should
also
 be considered
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e.
by
Suggestion
By
 building underpasses and flyovers and widening of roads. Pollution problems can
also
 be dealt with
introduction
Suggestion
the introduction
 of green vehicles which use electricity or solar power
instead
 of fossil fuels.
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