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Politicians private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The day-to-day living of political candidates ought not be published in
medias
Suggestion
the media
media
. In my opinion, I believe that the daily
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
 of elected political candidates should not be published in newspapers because of its negative effects. The
first
 reason why the secret
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
files
 of elected officials in political parties should not be exposed in
medias
Suggestion
the media
media
 is because their political enemies could use information gotten to
tanish
make dirty or spotty, as by exposure to air; also used metaphorically
tarnish
 their political image. A salient example is the former president of Nigeria, who constantly gave details of his businesses and travelling activities
on
Suggestion
in
 the
Dailylive
Suggestion
Daily Live
 Newspaper. He was murdered on his
last
 trip with his family members. Another reason why I disagree with the aforementioned view point is that
politican
a leader engaged in civil administration
politicians
 will live fake
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
files
 since they would want to portray good images to their fans.
As a result
, they may advertise unreal news to hype their political careers.
For instance
, most politicians who
wants
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want
 many votes from citizens advertise about their unrealistic developmental intentions, and when they are voted they do not
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
this claims
Suggestion
these claims
this claim
. In conclusion, I think that not publishing about the secre
t lif
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
es of politicians is beneficial because these will result in security threats for their loved ones and advertising lies to boos
t vo
Suggestion
votes
the vote
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