One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, people are enjoying longer
life
and
expectancy
of
life
is increasing
by
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with
each passing day due to improvements in
health department
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the health department
. I believe there are more positive aspects of
this
modification than its drawbacks.
To begin
with, one of the main negative effect of
longer
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a longer life
life
is that it
will increased
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will increase
the number of over aged population which will directly become a headache for the governments.
For example
, old people get retirement when they reach to a certain age and after that they do not able to work and living their
life
on the pension which is
pay
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paid
by the governments.
Moreover
, as people live longer and do not work the government have to bear the expense for a handful time and must provide fundamental facilities like free medical or provide accommodation and become a burden.
This
is why, extensive
life
and higher
life
expectancy
is a dilemma for the
world
.
In contrast
, living
long
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longer
and rise in
life
expectancy
has
myriad
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a myriad
of benefits.
As a result
of optimized medical techniques human are living for a long time and their
life
expectancy
has extended which gives opportunity to the people to work after the retirement as well and due to
this
reason some countries has enhanced the age limit for the retirement.
Furthermore
, longer
life
will help the
world
by different means which will be helpful for the
world
to be a better place to live.
For instance
, old people have more experience and understanding they can use their skills as a lecturer or
scientist
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a scientist
. Because of above mentioned reasons having a long
life
and higher
expectancy
rate is beneficial for the
world
. In summation,
although
there are some disadvantage of the
lengthy
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longest
lifespan and more
life
expectancy but
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expectancy, but
advantages
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the advantages
are more than disadvantages. I believe, it is a blessing for the
world
to have long
life
time and low mortality
rate which
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rate, which
will improve the quality of
life
in the
world
.
Accept space
.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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