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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that the people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, people are enjoying longer
life
 and
expectancy
 of
life
 is increasing
by
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with
 each passing day due to improvements in
health department
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the health department
. I believe there are more positive aspects of
this
 modification than its drawbacks.
To begin
 with, one of the main negative effect of
longer
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a longer life
life
 is that it
will increased
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will increase
 the number of over aged population which will directly become a headache for the governments.
For example
, old people get retirement when they reach to a certain age and after that they do not able to work and living their
life
 on the pension which is
pay
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paid
 by the governments.
Moreover
, as people live longer and do not work the government have to bear the expense for a handful time and must provide fundamental facilities like free medical or provide accommodation and become a burden.
This
 is why, extensive
life
 and higher
life
expectancy
 is a dilemma for the
world
.
In contrast
, living
long
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longer
 and rise in
life
expectancy
 has
myriad
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a myriad
 of benefits.
As a result
 of optimized medical techniques human are living for a long time and their
life
expectancy
 has extended which gives opportunity to the people to work after the retirement as well and due to
this
 reason some countries has enhanced the age limit for the retirement.
Furthermore
, longer
life
 will help the
world
 by different means which will be helpful for the
world
 to be a better place to live.
For instance
, old people have more experience and understanding they can use their skills as a lecturer or
scientist
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a scientist
. Because of above mentioned reasons having a long
life
 and higher
expectancy
 rate is beneficial for the
world
. In summation,
although
 there are some disadvantage of the
lengthy
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longest
 lifespan and more
life
expectancy but
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expectancy, but
advantages
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the advantages
 are more than disadvantages. I believe, it is a blessing for the
world
 to have long
life
 time and low mortality
rate which
Accept comma addition
rate, which
 will improve the quality of
life
 in the
world
.
Accept space
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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