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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree ?

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The younger generation is not using their
right
 to
participatein
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participate in
 elections in many nations across the world. The main problem
this
 causes
isthe
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is the
 selection of unsuitable candidates
at
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in
for
 various governmental positions,
andthe
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and the
 most viable solution is to start a public awareness campaign in the media and schools. The principal issue associated with youngsters not voting
inelections
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in elections
 is that non-deserving candidates end up being selected as representatives of society.
This
 means that these people can exploit the
powerthey
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power they
 get by being in different positions in the
state
.
This
 results in a rise in corruption in the government and
also
 leads to a high rate of political crimes.
For example
, the people of Jammu and Kashmir boycotted the
state
 government elections in
last two terms
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the last two terms
, which showed in a study by the newspaper The Hindu that J & K is the most corrupt
state
 in India. To tackle
this
 predicament, the best way is to start
apublicity
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a publicity
 campaign to make people aware of the importance of their
right
tovote
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to vote
. Citizens should be taught the value of their
vote
 and how they can use their
right
 to
vote
 effectively.
This
 would encourage them to participate in various levels of elections, and
therefore
right
 people will be selected to lead society, a country or a
state
.
For instance
, a local social activist
inmy
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in my
 area taught people about their role in the
last
 parliamentary elections and how it is going to affect their future,
this
 resulted in a record 90% voter
turn-up
the lap consisting of a turned-back hem encircling the end of the sleeve or leg
turnup
turnout
 in my town. In conclusion, the biggest problem caused by
younger
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young
 people ignoring their
right
 to
vote
 is bad politicians being selected as leaders, and
this
 can be addressed through a public awareness campaign to impart
theknowledge
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the knowledge
 on the importance of the
vote
 in a society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • non-biodegradable
  • pollution
  • biodegradable
  • sustainable
  • mitigate
  • ecosystem
  • recycling
  • reusable
  • environmental impact
  • eco-friendly
  • implementation
  • convenient alternatives
  • enforcement
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