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Some people think that when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Selection criteria for the employees have been a difficult task for
the employers throughout the
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employers throughout the
 past. Selecting an appropriate candidate for a position is crucial for a recruiter. Some argue that creativity and ability to
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 individually are important factors to consider prospective employee, while
other
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others
 believe workers should be able to
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 in
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team
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teams
a team
 and rigorous in operation.
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, I believe that different characteristics are required for different employers, and it depends on them which criterion needs to be prioritized more. There are some grounds for the belief that innovation and working independently are the key factors
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in
 recruiting.
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, innovative way of working could bring optimization and creativity to the
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 which could solve many problems that are unsolved as of now.
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, in software industry, invention of new design pattern has resolved many issues of software throughout the world and
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 optimized them.
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, working alone
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with
 any product could give a worker leeway to take risks and important decisions which in turn can give some artistic output.
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, while designing a house, if an architecture need to
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 with
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team
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a team
the team
, all will put their ideas which could create conflicts and affect the design.
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, inventiveness and expertise to
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 alone are imperative for employers to consider future employee.
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, there are some bases for
selection of applicant
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selection of an applicant
 who is
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an expert
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work
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 and obedient in terms of following orders strictly.
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, an individual in
team
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 would be more efficient than the one working alone.
Team
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work
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enhance
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enhances
 the ability to communicate as when any difficulty
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arises
,
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the person
people
a person
does not stuck
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does not stick
 and could ask others in
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 which could decrease the resolution time.
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, if a CAD machine operator would face any problem while creating a predefined die, he could ask others for the solution.
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, adhering to instruction given by the superior would not allow any space for the mistake,
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 could bring upon standard output by many individuals.
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, if a person can adhere to guidelines for operating a machine, it will never give faulty outcome.
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, efficiency to grasp the directions and working with others are vital for the employers. To conclude, I believe that firms where creative production is required,
candidate
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the candidate
candidates
a candidate
 with
innovativeness
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 and ability to
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 independently is required,
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,
person
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people
a person
the person
persons
 who can
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team
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a team
the team
teams
 and rigorous in operation are appropriate for positions in operation line.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovative
  • independent
  • creative
  • problem-solving skills
  • development
  • new ideas
  • solutions
  • productivity
  • competitiveness
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • consistency
  • adherence
  • policies
  • conflicts
  • efficiency
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