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Some people think that the development of technology helps to reduce crime, while other people think that it encourages crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Although
, it is sometimes thought that the evolution of technological devices helps in reducing criminal acts, while, others believe that it give support to
crime rate
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the crime rate
crime rates
. In my opinion, I strongly agree that the growing rate of
technology
 will help curb criminal activities. On the one hand, some people think that the development of technological devices will help to reduce
crime
 and I agree, because it will help in tracking and identifying the culprit.
For instance
, in
developed
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developing
 countries the installation of CCTV cameras on the street, shops, roads and cars has
help
Suggestion
helped
 in reducing the case of theft and public assault as criminals are aware and conscious of getting caught by the cameras.
Also
,
technology
 helps in the use of data and analytic tools to predict where the
crime
 might occur.
On the other hand
, other people believe that
technology
 motivates people to commit
crime
. While
this
 may be true, because people see it as a faster means of communication and
thus
 use it as a means of fraudulent act like stealing credit cards and blackmailing.
In other words
, technological device is used as a tool to rob people of their belongings.
Also
, criminals
uses
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use
technology
such
 as
tracker device
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a tracker device
 to monitor their target during robbery and murder attacks. Due to the rising of
technology it
Accept comma addition
technology, it
 is believed that people are more inspired to commit
crime
 to earn a living rather than doing a legitimate job. In conclusion, while people have different views on the development of
technology
. I strongly believe it is a welcoming improvement and I think more research should be done on how to use technological devices to eradicate criminal acts, because I believe it has helped in reducing the rate of criminal activities.
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