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Cities are becoming overcrowded. What are the causes of this situation, and what can be done to improve this situation?

#cities #situation
Rapid globalisation and migration is certainly a worrying challenge, especially in urban
cities
.
This
 essay shall discuss the possible reasons and solutions
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this
 situation. Perhaps the main cause of
increasing
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the increasing
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 population
cities
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in cities
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 is because of unemployment in rural areas.
While
 some people shift to urban areas in search of
high paying
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 jobs
due to
 their tagged responsibilities at home, others migrate to enhance their lifestyle
according to
 their capabilities and talent. In developing
cities
,
for instance
,
labour
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 class is highly required for
construction
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the construction
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 of homes and large buildings,
hence
, labourers migrate from small villages to big
cities
. Another major reason is travelling.
While
 some people
finds
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 a place to reside near
work place
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workplace
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, others travel daily to and from,
countryside
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the countryside
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 to the city which results in traffic jams and overcrowded public
transports
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transport
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.
Therefore
, urban
cities
are
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 maybe financially strong but
also
 overpopulated. There are few apparent solutions to tackle
this
 problem. High capacity transport system could be launched, with ameliorated actions and coordinated
partnership
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partnerships
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 between public and private industry.
For example
, if there are adequate public transport facilities between
cities
 and
countryside
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the countryside
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, people could easily move in and move out of the city which will ultimately reduce the emerging traffic on the roads
along with
 increasing non-residents of the city.
Moreover
, companies should allow their employees to work from home so that they can work effectively without getting tired
in
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 travelling.
This
 practice would definitely mitigate the issues of overcrowding in developed and developing
cities
.
To conclude
, even though the
cities
 will continue to grow at rapid speed,
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with the combined efforts of government and private companies, the issue of intensifying overcrowding could be relieved to some extent.
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Task Response
Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines the reasons for urban overcrowding and the solutions. Also, provide a clear position or opinion on the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on structuring the essay with clear paragraphing, topic sentences, and logical flow of ideas. Use cohesive devices to link ideas and improve the overall coherence.
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