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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge.

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
Today society is a modernized society where each and everyone is busy in their phones, well
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the cause or intention underlying an action or situation, especially in the phrase 'the whys and wherefores'
why
you
 not? Cause
internet
 is providing so many things right from shopping to booking tickets, you name it and
internet
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the internet
 has it. But despite all these it even has some disadvantages. Both will be discussed by the end of
this
 essay.
Internet
 a word which was not known until the 19th century, from the 20th century
onwards
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onwards, this
this
 word became an addiction amongst the world. Many different companies
such
 as amazon, flip kart and other multinational firms have established their business over the
internet
 for the convenience of people. They provide a large range of of goods that consumers require
on
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in
for
 their day to day basis. They even facilitate the consumers by providing door to door service so that the consumers are satisfied
.
Accept space
.
 But apart from online shopping consumers can now
also
 order groceries medicines, shoes and even can make payment and book tickets online using e-payment.
Internet
 has been providing so many things that a consumer names it and gets it at a cheap price. But apart from all these advantages
internet
also
 has some disadvantages
such
 as it has become easier for the hackers to get the information
of
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about
on
to
consumers
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consumers'
 card details by scamming them and by creating fake messages.
Hence
, one should use the
internet
 wisely and should be aware of the facts that hackers use. Banks and other firms trading online always spread awareness regarding the scams so that people stay aware.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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