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Every year several languages die out Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

With several
languages
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 dying out every year, it would be misleading to suggest that
this
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 is unimportant because
life
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 would be easier if there were fewer
languages
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 in the world. As far as I am concerned, linguistic diversity is pivotal to
culture
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, and its decline does not necessarily mean
life
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 will become easier.
Languages
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 are essential containers of local cultures. A
language
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 is usually born and evolves alongside the development of the local economy, changes in governance, and the growth of regional
culture
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.
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, it serves as a significant medium for carrying local traditions.
People
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 can gain a deep understanding of local cultures through
analyzing
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languages
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.
For instance
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, in Chinese
culture
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, the term “和” (harmony) reflects the Chinese
people
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’s expectation for a harmonious family atmosphere, genuine friendships, and healthy relationships. In American
culture
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,
however
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,
people
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emphasize
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 the value of “liberty”; they tend to pursue individual careers and are more likely to overlook others’ feelings. If linguistic diversity declines,
people
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 will have fewer means to study and preserve a
culture
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.
Moreover
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, whether
life
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 becomes easier depends on complex factors.
Although
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 a decrease in the number of
languages
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 might allow more
people
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 to use the same
language
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 to communicate,
life
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 would not necessarily become easier—especially for those whose native
language
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 becomes extinct.
People
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 who can no longer speak their local
language
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 often feel disconnected from their own
culture
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. They frequently lack a sense of belonging and, without cultural support, may feel confused when making important
life
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 decisions. In conclusion,
language
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 diversity remains highly important in today’s world.
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, we should pay more attention to it and make an effort to learn and sustain our local
languages
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.

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task
Your view is clear. The essay would gain from a more balanced view, e.g., you could note a small group who think life is easier with one language, then explain why this is not true, and give your refute.
task
Add more strong examples from more places and explain how the loss of language hurts communities.
coherence
Improve link between paragraphs with clear topic sentences.
grammar
Check sentence flow, shorten long sentences.
vocabulary
Use simple vocab but avoid broad general form.
content
Clear stance against the idea that fewer languages make life easier.
coherence
Good use of connectors such as Moreover and In conclusion.
content
Contains specific example from culture.
overall
Overall readability is good for IELTS task 2.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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