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Some people think that taking care of the environment is the responsibility of individuals but others think that it is the responsibility of the government. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is an ongoing debate about the party to be responsible for the
environment
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 and while some people think that the government ought to take
care
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 of it, others are of the opinion that it is the individual's task and in my opinion, I consider the latter due to the fact that it is the people that are in close contact with their immediate domain. On one hand, the sole responsibility of keeping the immediate
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 clean should rest on the shoulders of the people in that territory and I agree.
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 can be done by making sure that their
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 is clean and cultivating the habit of throwing
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 in the appropriate place
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 of littering them around.
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, littered
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 can have adverse consequences on the
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 which includes the blocking of drainage systems and flooding.
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, in the area I reside in, the residents come out every Saturday take
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 of the streets and gutters to ensure they clean.
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, fines are meted out to people who don't participate.
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, the government
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 a huge role to play in the task of taking
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 of their territory and
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 can be in form of enacting laws prohibiting littering of
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 on the roads.
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, they can
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 get lands in the outskirts where these dirts when picked up by the agency, can be kept and recycled.
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, in 2013, the Edo State Government put a law in place to ban the act of throwing
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 on the streets and
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 made available dustbins for the
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 purpose. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I believe that individuals should have the primary responsibility of taking
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 of their
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 to prevent environmental mishaps.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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