In many countries, people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. What do you think the reasons for this and how can it be solved?

These days

people ill health

Suggestion

people with ill health

is an issue

that is

trending across the globe.Some people believe that unhealthiness is caused by lifestyle behaviours.The root causes can be too much work to do and poor

diet

Nevertheless

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lifestyle modifications are possible with appropriate interventions

such

as gyms at workplaces and nutritional

counseling

something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action

counselling

Firstly

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most people now work more than one job in order to cater for the rising cost of living.

This

leaves out little to no time for exercising.To illustrate, a person may be working from 8-5

then

take on another shift in another location from 6-8pm

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there

wont

will not

won't

be time to exercise as most gyms close at 8pm.

However

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the employer may

also

intervene to improve the health of the worker by establishing gyms or exercising facilities at the workplace

such

that any employee can exercise during that break

for example

on tea break

Suggestion

on a tea break

or lunch break. To add on

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the eating habits

also

affect health.When a habit has been there for long it is usually difficult to

break especially

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break, especially

when it comes to food.Changing

diet

can be so hard because we acquire tastes as we grow up

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this

is why some of the healthy foods may not be implemented into the daily

diet

for the reason being that they

dont

do not

don't

taste so good.

Nevertheless

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nutritional

counseling

something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action

counselling

can go a long way in making sure that people adjust their diets.

For example

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food festivals can be can be done frequently

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these should have presentations on

benefits

Suggestion

the benefits

of good

diet

on one's body and ways to do it on a daily basis. In conclusion

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although

unheathiness

emotions experienced when not in a state of well-being

unhappiness

unhealthiness

is caused by poor

diet

and lack of exercise

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I believe some solutions

such

as working out areas in workplaces and professional guidance on

healthy

Suggestion

a healthy diet

diet

can go a long way in addressing

unhealty

not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind

unhealthy

lifestyles.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

285 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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