In many countries, people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. What do you think the reasons for this and how can it be solved?

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These days
people ill health
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people with ill health
is an issue
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trending across the globe.Some people believe that unhealthiness is caused by lifestyle behaviours.The root causes can be too much work to do and poor
diet
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lifestyle modifications are possible with appropriate interventions
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as gyms at workplaces and nutritional
counseling
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
counselling
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most people now work more than one job in order to cater for the rising cost of living.
This
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leaves out little to no time for exercising.To illustrate, a person may be working from 8-5
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take on another shift in another location from 6-8pm
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there
wont
will not
won't
be time to exercise as most gyms close at 8pm.
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the employer may
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intervene to improve the health of the worker by establishing gyms or exercising facilities at the workplace
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that any employee can exercise during that break
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on tea break
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on a tea break
or lunch break. To add on
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the eating habits
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affect health.When a habit has been there for long it is usually difficult to
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break, especially
when it comes to food.Changing
diet
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can be so hard because we acquire tastes as we grow up
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this
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is why some of the healthy foods may not be implemented into the daily
diet
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for the reason being that they
dont
do not
don't
taste so good.
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nutritional
counseling
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
counselling
can go a long way in making sure that people adjust their diets.
For example
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food festivals can be can be done frequently
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these should have presentations on
benefits
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the benefits
of good
diet
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on one's body and ways to do it on a daily basis. In conclusion
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although
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unheathiness
emotions experienced when not in a state of well-being
unhappiness
unhealthiness
is caused by poor
diet
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and lack of exercise
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I believe some solutions
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as working out areas in workplaces and professional guidance on
healthy
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a healthy diet
diet
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can go a long way in addressing
unhealty
not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
lifestyles.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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