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Culture is turning similar around the world. What are the reasons? Is it a positive trend or a negative trend.

#culture #world #trend
It is
fact
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a fact
the fact
 that
world
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the world
 has changed in small town because of identical lifestyle everywhere. These
is
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are
 due to
variou
of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity
various
 reasons which are mentioned in
following passage
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the following passage
 and it is definitely a boon to society.
First
 of all, globalization has made possible to get things available at every corner of the
world
. The main reason is to bring equality in society where commodities can
e
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
be
 easily accessed by all individuals. Whereas, earlier certain products
was only sold
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were only sold
 in specified region
such
 as valuable jewellery but now each area
co
a hard ferromagnetic silver-white bivalent or trivalent metallic element; a trace element in plant and animal nutrition
Co
sists
put into a certain place or abstract location
sets
atleast
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at least
 one jewel merchant or a goldsmith. Inevitably,
this
 is for one's betterment through the changes in trend, many places are been
developing
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developed
 their way of life.
Moreover
, similarities
has helped
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have helped
 to ring few ethical
code especially
Accept comma addition
code, especially
in particular
profession
Accept comma addition
profession, such
such
 as dress code of cops with
cap
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caps
a cap
 that are
quiet
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
 similar throughout
world
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the world
.
Thus
,
this
 uniqueness help civilized people to
lookout
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look out
 tourist if help is required in emergency.
Furthermore
,
this
 has benefited people around the
world
 for enjoying
service
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the service
 of their choice.
In addition
, technology has played
great role
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a great role
 for availing range of varieties with best substitute products for consumers while shopping.
For instance
, e-shopping, where
person
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people
a person
 can view
enumorose
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
 items from all types of brand from
list
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the list
 of countries. In conclusion,
global village
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the global village
 is undoubtedly an advantage for individuals and nation because it helps
for
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in
 elevating economic conditions.
Finally
,
this
 credit totally goes to advance technology.
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