Adults do very less Exercise these days .Some people think that showing sporting events on television such as Olympics and world cup tournaments can be the best way to encourage adults to do exercise , others believe there are other effective ways to do so. Discuss both views and state your opinion

Performing physical activities are mandatory to live healthy.
Howeve
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However
, nowadays adults
are giving
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are given
less attention towards
exercise
.Some individual hold the perception that by telecasting sports events through television is appropriate method
,
Accept space
,
while some believe other alternatives
such
as cheap cost of gyms along with doing
exercise
by other family members can
also
motivate them.
This
essay
firstly
throws a light on both view points,
nonetheless
,
this
essay stands with
latter view
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the latter view
because of
presence
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the presence
of other ways. As above mentioned, advocates of former view have an idea that some sports events through Tv can capture the attention of adults.To explain it more, sometimes, when people watch
sports performing
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sports, performing
by players, they examine their stamina, their physical fitness, can lead them towards doing
exercise
which
is basic necessity
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is a basic necessity
to live fit.Some people,
for example
,
gives
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give
the consent that they are
prefering
make ready or suitable or equip in advance for a particular purpose or for some use, event, etc
preparing
referring
to do some activities because of the impact of watching some sports
,
Accept space
,
it proves that watching sports can have long lasting impact on the mentality of individuals.
However
, others have notion that some other ways can be implemented to encourage adults as government can install gyms in proximity of local areas at low cost which everybody can afford
,
Accept space
,
and it can be a suitable to put forth
this
process. As, it is true that sometimes people deny the idea to go to gyms because of
exorbitant price
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the exorbitant price
exorbitant prices
of
enterence
something that provides access (to get in or get out)
entrance
intolerance
in
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to
these places.To add to it, if family members are interested in doing
exercise
such
as jogging, running, walking, they can easily get the company of others by telling them the benefits of these things, who
are doing
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is doing
nothing in
this
field. It can be explained better by an example, in my locality children of my neighbour used to go for morning walk which is instructed to them by their teachers
,
Accept space
,
with the passing of days they have
also
encouraged their parents to involve in it. In
this
way, they now are getting benefits of exercises only because of
effects
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the effects
of their offsprings. To conclude,
this
essay has discussed both ideas as
explianed
make plain and comprehensible
explained
earlier.But, it believes only one method
such
as television documentaries regarding sports are not enough.Some other substitutes which are fully elaborated in the form of establishment of gyms along with family members' endeavours can
also
prove a boon for adults to do
exercise
and to enjoy a disease free long span of life.
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