Adults do very less Exercise these days .Some people think that showing sporting events on television such as Olympics and world cup tournaments can be the best way to encourage adults to do exercise , others believe there are other effective ways to do so. Discuss both views and state your opinion

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Performing physical activities are mandatory to live healthy.

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However

, nowadays adults

are giving

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are given

less attention towards

exercise

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.Some individual hold the perception that by telecasting sports events through television is appropriate method

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while some believe other alternatives

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as cheap cost of gyms along with doing

exercise

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by other family members can

also

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motivate them.

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throws a light on both view points,

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the latter view

because of

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the presence

of other ways. As above mentioned, advocates of former view have an idea that some sports events through Tv can capture the attention of adults.To explain it more, sometimes, when people watch

sports performing

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sports, performing

by players, they examine their stamina, their physical fitness, can lead them towards doing

exercise

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which

is basic necessity

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is a basic necessity

to live fit.Some people,

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give

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make ready or suitable or equip in advance for a particular purpose or for some use, event, etc

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to do some activities because of the impact of watching some sports

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it proves that watching sports can have long lasting impact on the mentality of individuals.

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, others have notion that some other ways can be implemented to encourage adults as government can install gyms in proximity of local areas at low cost which everybody can afford

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and it can be a suitable to put forth

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process. As, it is true that sometimes people deny the idea to go to gyms because of

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the exorbitant price

exorbitant prices

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something that provides access (to get in or get out)

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these places.To add to it, if family members are interested in doing

exercise

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as jogging, running, walking, they can easily get the company of others by telling them the benefits of these things, who

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is doing

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field. It can be explained better by an example, in my locality children of my neighbour used to go for morning walk which is instructed to them by their teachers

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with the passing of days they have

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encouraged their parents to involve in it. In

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way, they now are getting benefits of exercises only because of

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the effects

of their offsprings. To conclude,

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essay has discussed both ideas as

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earlier.But, it believes only one method

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as television documentaries regarding sports are not enough.Some other substitutes which are fully elaborated in the form of establishment of gyms along with family members' endeavours can

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prove a boon for adults to do

exercise

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and to enjoy a disease free long span of life.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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