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Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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People have argued about how the
government
 should utilise their budgets on transportation areas. Some people think that the
government
 should spend more money on developing streets and highways, while others believe that improving public
transportations
 is the most important one. The following essay will discuss in details about it, but I do believe that both aspects are important and should be proportionately improved. On the one hand, a group of people think that the
government
 should focus on improving their street, road and highway facilities. They believe that public accesses are vital for the economic development of the respective country. Without the existence of qualified roads and highways, it will be difficult for industries to grow, as there will be some obstacles for the supply of raw materials and deliveries of goods.
Consequently
, it will impact on the efficiency of many companies and
also
 to the
government
's income tax.
On the other hand
, other people think governments should spend more budgets on improving and maintaining public transportation
such
 as buses, trains, aeroplanes and ferries. They believe that if the
government
 could improve the quality of these mass transportation facilities, it will reduce traffic and air pollution problems. As public
transportations
 become more convenient and safe, more people will use them, and it will gradually reduce the number of private vehicle users. As a
consequent
Suggestion
consequence
, it will reduce traffic congestion and reduce air pollution as well. In conclusion, I personally believe that the
government
's spending on public accesses and
transportations
 are both essentials. And it becomes the
government
's task to allocate those budgets proportionately for both areas since we could not focus on one area and abandoned the other. It would be useless for a country to have good public
transportations
, without the support of good roads and highways.

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