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Both The Poor And The Rich Find Accessibility Into University Difficult

#accessibility #university
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Some people
thinks
Suggestion
think
 that
its
it is
it's
 difficult for both the rich and the poor people to find it difficult to get the accessibility into universities but I
am not quite agree
Suggestion
do not quite agree
 with the thought. I believe that, people coming from solvent family get more advantages comparing to those who come from
poor family
Suggestion
poor families
a poor family
.
To begin
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 with, being born in a rich family you will get better
finantial
involving financial matters
financial
financially
 support that you can afford good institutions if you
arn't
are not or (in questions) am not
aren't
 good in education. All private institutions can offer them
option
Suggestion
the option
 because of having the
abilility
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
ability
 to pay huge amount of money.
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Also their
Accept comma addition
Also, their
 parents having
good realtionship
Suggestion
a good relationship
good relationship
good relationships
 with
governing body
Suggestion
the governing body
 or committee members of colleges or universities so that they
also
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 get other facilities. On the other side, it's always a hard job for young people with no money so they have to strive hard and
also
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 must maintain good academic records. If
the
people in general
they
 fail to win scholarship from universities it's impossible for them to
contintue
continue a certain state, condition, or activity
continue
 what not match the scenario with
finantially
from a financial point of view
financially
 solvent guy. Statistics provides that people from economically weak family are suffering more drop out rate from college
thato
pointing out something
that
univn
not even or uniform as e.g. in shape or texture
uneven
 rich family because of inability to pay higher
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fee. To recapitulate
, i
it is
it's
ts easier for a child to get admitted
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