Some parents believe that children need strict rules. Other parents believe children should have a lot of freedom to make decisions on their own. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Establishing rules with children can be complicated. Young children look to their parents for security and order, and rules are one important way they acquire
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, as they mature, young people need room to make decisions so they can develop an independent sense of responsibility towards themselves and others. For
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reason, I believe that while children need clear and consistently enforced rules, they should not be restricted so severely that they have very few opportunities to think independently. Most children are subjected to rules they dislike.
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, when the purpose of a rule is communicated clearly and the parents’ enforcement is fair and consistent, a rule can help children to learn how to take on responsibility and
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, at a certain age, very young kids are capable of cleaning up their own messes, but often they must be told to do so. The
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must be taught, through rules and repetition, that taking responsibility for one’s own messes is important. As another example, many teenagers don’t always think through the consequences of their actions fully before they
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impulsively because their brains are wired to do so.
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is why parents should be very firm about rules that prevent risky or
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, parents should not be overbearing. The goal of parenting should be to prepare a
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to make independent choices that will lead to a happy and fulfilling life. The best way to achieve
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goal is to grant more and more freedom as the
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progresses towards adulthood.
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, at some point a
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must learn to take school work seriously and help out around the house. The ultimate goal is for the
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to internalize the desire to be a good student and a helpful housemate. If parents fail to demonstrate trust by allowing some freedom for their children to try (and sometimes fail) to do the right things independently, it is likely that the
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will
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out against
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the strict rules
rather than internalize them. Of course, every
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will respond to rules differently.
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is yet another reason why it’s important for parents to find appropriate balance. While parents should enforce rules with consistency and clarity, they should constantly seek opportunities for a
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to show that he or she can
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the right way independently.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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