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Today people are travelling more than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? (272)

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In the contemporary era, more and more
people
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 are travelling.
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 is because today’s busy and hectic lifestyles have made travelling a vital part of life, but
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 there are some advantages of going out for exertion
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 as new experiences and navigation of new cultures.
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 trend of going on vacations, nowadays, has increased in comparison to the older times
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 the modern style of living.
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 is because
people
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 usually have hectic schedules during their routine life which makes it essential for them to take a break from their busy tenures and go out for vacation.
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, it has been recently recorded that vacation periods of employees at most workplaces have increased in number when compared to the past,
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 the fact that they need to give themselves a refreshment period by means of travelling. Some of the benefits that travelling offers to the travellers are that they experience new things
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 as different cuisines, lifestyles, and different perspectives of
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 living around the world.
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 that, they navigate new cultures, which allows them to broaden their own perspectives and learn various languages and traditions.
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 to say that they widen their knowledge from every phase of life.
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, international travelling allows tourists to experience a whole new world filled with new adventures, experiences and enjoyable moments. In conclusion, a hectic modern lifestyle is one of the main reasons why an increased number of
people
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 are going to travel;
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,
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 trend offers numerous benefits like the experience of new cultures and traditions.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point. This will enhance the clarity and coherence of your essay.
task achievement
Work on including more varied and specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy to follow.
task achievement
The response effectively addresses both parts of the task, explaining reasons for increased travel and benefits for the traveller.
coherence cohesion
The ideas presented are generally clear and logically sequenced, ensuring a smooth reading experience.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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