Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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In these days, a

person

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is successful if he has enough

money

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. I think that

money

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is not the only factor to measure a

person

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's success because you have to achieve something in your

life

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to be a successful

person

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. And

money

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is not always a factor while achieving your goals. A

person

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is successful if you are able to

fullfil

put in effect

fulfil

your goals by making a significant impact on people's

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life

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live

. Measuring the

sucess

an event that accomplishes its intended purpose

success

is one thing, while earning the

money

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other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

thing. People having enough amount of wealth does not mean that they are successful.

Becuase

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Because

some people inherit wealth from their ancestors without

acheiving

to gain with effort

achieving

anything in their

life

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, one of my friends has a lot of

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money which

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money, which

is earned by his

father

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. His

father

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belongs to a poor family. To improve the family conditions his

father

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worked day and

night which

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night, which

helped him to earn the people's respect and

money

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, my friend does not have any dream and he does not even work much.

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inherting

having the legal right to inherit

inheriting

money

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from his

father

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does not mean that he is a successful

person

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. A successful

person

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never thinks about

money

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. He always thinks about his goals

first

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. A successful

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person not

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person, not

only focus on his goals, but he

also

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thinks that how his actions are making

impact

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an impact

other's

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other's lives

the other's life

life

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For example

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, a friend had a goal to open

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hospital for poor people.

First

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he saved a lot of

money

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by working in various IT companies.

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he quit his job and started his own hospital where free treatment is given to people who are not able to bear the medical expenses. Thinking of others by keeping a goal in your mind makes you a successful

person

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. All around the world, people

measures

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measure

success with the amount of

money

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you have earned. A

person

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should have some goals in his

life

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to be a successful

person

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. Especially, a successful

person

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work

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works

with other persons to achieve his goal. And while doing

that he

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that, he

also

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make sure that his goals are helping others.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

346 words

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Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many young people do not spend their holidays and weekends doing outdoor activities like hiking and climbing in natural environments.

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?