Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

In these days, a
person
is successful if he has enough
money
. I think that
money
is not the only factor to measure a
person
's success because you have to achieve something in your
life
to be a successful
person
. And
money
is not always a factor while achieving your goals. A
person
is successful if you are able to
fullfil
put in effect
fulfil
your goals by making a significant impact on people's
life
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live
. Measuring the
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
is one thing, while earning the
money
is
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
thing. People having enough amount of wealth does not mean that they are successful.
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Because
some people inherit wealth from their ancestors without
acheiving
to gain with effort
achieving
anything in their
life
.
For example
, one of my friends has a lot of
money which
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money, which
is earned by his
father
. His
father
belongs to a poor family. To improve the family conditions his
father
worked day and
night which
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night, which
helped him to earn the people's respect and
money
.
However
, my friend does not have any dream and he does not even work much.
Hence
,
inherting
having the legal right to inherit
inheriting
money
from his
father
does not mean that he is a successful
person
. A successful
person
never thinks about
money
. He always thinks about his goals
first
. A successful
person not
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person, not
only focus on his goals, but he
also
thinks that how his actions are making
impact
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an impact
on
other's
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other's lives
the other's life
life
.
For example
, a friend had a goal to open
an
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a
hospital for poor people.
First
he saved a lot of
money
by working in various IT companies.
Then
he quit his job and started his own hospital where free treatment is given to people who are not able to bear the medical expenses. Thinking of others by keeping a goal in your mind makes you a successful
person
. All around the world, people
measures
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measure
success with the amount of
money
you have earned. A
person
should have some goals in his
life
to be a successful
person
. Especially, a successful
person
work
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works
with other persons to achieve his goal. And while doing
that he
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that, he
also
make sure that his goals are helping others.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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