The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.

The line graph below shows the changes in the share price of Outokumpu companies in euros between January 2006 and December 2010.
The line graph illustrates data about the
share
price
change of Outokumpu companies, between January 2006 and December 2010.
Overall
, what
stand
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out from the graph is that the
share
price
reached a maximum of around 30
euros
during
mid 2006
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.
However
, In 2008, the
share
price
of Outokumpu companies fell below 10
euros
, which is
least
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the least
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in the given
period
. As regards,
share
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the share
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price
of Outokumpu started
around
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at around
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13
euros
at the start of the
period
,
then
it sharply went up to 30
euros
by
mid 2006
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mid-2006
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which was
maximum
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the maximum
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during the given
period
. Since
then
the
price
significantly dropped to over 20
euros
by June 2007 followed by a dramatic increase of around 10
euros
by the end of 2007. From the start of 2008,
share
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the share
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price
plunged by nearly 25
euros
, reaching the minimum value of over 5
euros
in roughly 5 months.
Subsequently
, it gradually increased to 15
euros
by early 2008,
from
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and from
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then
marginal increases and decreases, the stock
price
reached nearly the same value as it is at the start of the
period
in December 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words share, price, euros, period with synonyms.
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