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A friend has written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem in the past. Write a reply to your friend. In your letter: tell your friend you understand the problem explain what happened to you in the past suggest possible solutions to the problem.

#friend #advice #work
Dear Gina,
Last
 week, I received a letter from you. I am really sorry to hear that you are in the same trouble in which I was 2 years ago. Being in that
situation
, I can really understand your
situation
 and happy to advise you to get past the
situation
. When I was in final year of college, I had a dispute with the hostel
warden
 regarding the
food
quality
. Being the head
food
 committee, I had to raise the voice in favour of other students stayed in the girls hostel. When I explained
warden
 about the
quality
 of
food
 served to the students and how the
food
 was being prepared,
instead
 of taking
action
 on workers, she took
action
 against me and expelled me from the college with no reason. After reading your letter, I immediately understood the
situation
 in you are right now. To get out of
this
situation
, you need to write a letter to the head of department. Clearly explain them about everything. Tell them the concerns of students raised on the
quality
 of
food
.
Also
 list down the bullet points which you have discussed with
warden
 to improve on the
food
quality
. With no doubt, mention about the
action
 taken by the
warden
 after hearing all
this
. After hearing all
this
, they will immediately take
action
 on the
warden
 and immediately allow you to join the college from the same day. I hope
this
 helps you. Yours faithfully, Tina

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