in many countries, number of older people are increase. some people says that this will cause more problems to that countries. others say that older people can play a role in society. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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IT IS OFTEN BELIEVE THAT IN MANY NATIONS, LIFE EXPETANCY HAS BEEB INCREASING DUE TO ADVANCEMENT THE TECHNOLOGY. FEW FOLKS FEELS THAT IT WILL CREAT A PROBLEMS FOR THEM. WHILE OTHER SAYS THAT THEY CAN CONTRIBUTE IN THE COMMINITY DEVELOPMENT. FROM MY OPINION, AGINING POPULATION DO FORM PROBLEM FOR THEM LIKE HEALTH PROBLEM AND SO ON. BUT IT IS
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TRUE THAT
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PEOPLE CAN BE A ROLE MODEL IN SIGNIFICANT COMMI ITY DEVELOPMENT. TO START WITH,
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, MORE SENIOR PEOPLE, THERE WILL BE MORE HELATH PROBLEMS. WHEN MORE HEALTH PROBLEMS OCCOURED, THEY TAKE MORE INSUARANCE.
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WHEN THEY GET ILL THEY USE THEIR INSUARANCE AND EMPLOYER HAS TO PAY MORE FOR THAT. EVENTHOUGH THEY ARE NOT WORKING ENOUGH FOR IT. TO ELABORATE. AS PER THE THE STUDY CONDUCATED IN INDIA, SO
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GOVERNMENT IS INCREASING MORE TAX. SO
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HAPPENS, THERE WILL MORE BURDEN ON THE TODAY'S YOUTH.FOR AN EXAMPLE, HOSPITAL STUDY CONDUCTED IN INDIA SHOWS THAT THERE ARE MORE AGED PEOPLE ADMITTED IJ THE HOSPITAL DUE TO VARIOUS HEALTH PROBLEMS LIKE A HEART ATTACK, DIABILITY, PNUMONIA ETC.
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HAS FORMED MORE INSURANCE CLAIM FORM THE WORKER. WHEN THEY DO
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AUTHORITY INCREASED TAX FRO EVERY THINKGS. SO BY
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THERE ARE MORE PRESSURE ON THE YOUNGSTERS TO PRODUCE MORE MONEY.
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, ADGED PEOPLE CAN CONTRIBUTE IN SOCIETY ENHANCEMENT BY SHARING THEIR EXPERIENCES WITH THE TODAY'S GENERATION, TEACHING THEM HOW TO BE A GOOD MEMBER OF THE SOCIETY
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BY TEACHEING THEM MORAL VALUES AND CUSTOM OF THAT COUNTRY. TO ILLUSTRATE, BY HAVING
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INFORMATION AND KNOWLEDGE FROM SENIORS, YOUNGSTERS CAN BE GOOD INDIVIDUALS OF THE SOCIETY. FOR AN INSTANCE, I HAD A GRANDFATHER WHO TAUGHT ME THAT WHATEVER HAPPENS DO NOT LOSE YOUR CHARACTER. DEAL WITH IT AND HELP EVERYONE WHO ARE IN NEED.
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, THERE ARE DECREASE IN NUMBER OF NEW GENERATION IN COMPARE TO OLDER ONE. IN MY OPINION
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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