The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two charts of a survey show the most common merits and demerits of visiting Bowen
island
according to
visitors.
Overall
,
high
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the high
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cost of living is the primary disadvantage of visiting Bowen
Island
.
In contrast
, most of them feel that the local
people
are very friendly. On the whole,
people
felt that culture, accommodation, scenery and the
people
are the primary pros of the
Island
.
On the other hand
, bad weather, high cost of living, entertainment and food are major cons of visiting the
island
. Forty-two
percent
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per cent
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of the
people
said they like the hospitality of the
Island
. Around one-
third
of the
people
who completed the survey said that the scenery of the
Island
was magnificent. Visitors felt that culture was slightly better than the accommodation at 12% and 11% respectively. Half of the
people
who completed the survey agreed that the high cost of living is the primary drawback of the
island
, followed by a quarter of participants
said
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who said
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that the
Island
has entertainment problems.
Subsequently
, 15% of the respondents felt that the
Island
has bad weather.
Finally
,
one tenth
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one-tenth
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of the participants had food problems
in
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on
show examples
the
Island
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • According to the survey
  • Visitors reported
  • The pie charts show
  • The most common advantages/disadvantages
  • A significant proportion
  • A small percentage
  • In contrast
  • Notably
  • The largest segment
  • Similarly
  • On the other hand
  • A major advantage/disadvantage
  • To highlight
  • Overall effect
  • Impact the experience
  • In summary
  • Illustrates
  • Reflects
  • Highlights
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