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People should be retired at the age of 60 or they should work as long as they want? To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Individual retired
age
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 commonly witnessed 60, from
there
of them or themselves
their
 work place.The question is arising that whether they should work beyond retired
age
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 or not.I opined that they should definitely continue their job irrespective of
age
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.
Undoutedly
Suggestion
Undoubtedly
, when old
age
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 people do their job for long time period they can spend life as self - reliant they do not need to depend on others
.
Accept space
.
ultimately
Suggestion
Ultimately
,
Accept space
,
it
also
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assit
a useful or valuable quality
asset
assist
assent
 to the family members to stay burden free from the
responsiblities
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
responsibility
 of grey hair people due to
this
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 they would never consider as
aa
Suggestion
an
a
 unworthy citizens of society. Working for
long perio
Suggestion
a long period
long periods
d of time
Suggestion
has also aided
also
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 aid the government because authority is liable to provide pensions for senio
r
Accept space
,
,
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however, if
however
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 if they work for more time
conjunction used in comparatives
than
then
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 it inevitably reduce the pressure
o
Suggestion
on
f pensions from
regulatory bod
Suggestion
a regulatory body
regulatory bodies
the regulatory body
y

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