In some countries, people follow the latest fashion and hairstyles. In your opinion, what is influencing this? Is this a good or bad thing?

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These days, nation from certain countries prefer to abide the new
exlusive
not divided or shared with others
exclusive
explosive
clothes and
hairstyles
. In my opinion,
this
is clearly evident that some countries compete each other and wants to be
first
each sphere, so
fashion
is not
exception
Suggestion
exceptional
. With modern world
fashion
develop together and develop very well, while there are some gap where should be improved before getting worse. No secret, that everyone loves
fashion each of
Suggestion
fashion, each of
us wants to wear a good costume or dress and wants to be individual, unique and smart. To track by latest
fashion
and hairstyle is not criminal,
on the
contrary
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contrary, this
this
is more opportunity in order to show that you are
intellegent
having the capacity for thought and reason especially to a high degree
intelligent
and
elegent
refined and tasteful in appearance or behavior or style
elegant
. If a person going to an interview, the person
defenetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
defiantly
wants to impress interviewers not only by knowledge, dress and hairstyle as well.
Meanwhile clothes
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Meanwhile, clothes
will describe who you are, attitude to yourself if the person is tiny it means that his approach to the work will be similar accurate and more attentive.
Fashion
occupied certain countries and for them
fashion
is
main income
Suggestion
the main income
a main income
to the budget.
On the other hand
, that
fashion
sector became worse and worse. Designers making
such
design clothes
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
less material more naked
mody
relating to a recently developed fashion or style
mod
moody
. Audience
precieve
Suggestion
preserves
preserve
perceive
that kind of idea repulsive, namely
elder generation
Suggestion
the elder generation
and certain
yound
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
young
generation. As far as parents concerned growing generation will get those
type
Suggestion
types
of clothes as normal for routine and lose the value of the clothes.
Nevertheless
,
fashion
industries and
hairstyles
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
and got own place in these
life
Suggestion
lives
. In conclusion, every industry should be moderately creative,
otherwise
fashion
sectors and
hairstyles
will be over creative. Each clothes should be made tasty and thin same as
hairstyles
.
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