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the average standard of people’s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement. give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own experience or knowledge.

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Health
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 is one of the most crucial
thing
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things
 of our life and body. Some people consider
health
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 as the most crucial treasure in life, but some people don't even consider
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of them or themselves
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that
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a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
 as a treasure because they are being too busy and it will lower the standard of
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 in the future. So, I personally agree that there are several reasons why
health
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 is reducing as the time goes.
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 of all, people nowadays, especially the older ones are becoming workaholic. They always put works as the top list of their daily task as it is their only activity.
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, many of them become too tired because they
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work
 until late at night and are not getting enough sleep without considering the side effect of their hearts. Some
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of
 them even don't have a proper meal or even a healthy meal.
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, the environment in our places is getting worse. There is so much pollution from cars, cigarettes, deforestation.
This
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 kind of aspects is
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 reducing our
health
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.
For instance
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, when people work in outdoor places they inhale too much pollution that goes into their lungs,
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, it will reduce the
health
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 of the lungs, but they don't even think to use a mask for outdoor activity. Eventually, as the time goes, their energy is getting lower. In conclusion, people nowadays are more careless of their
health
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. They prefer to do their work
first
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 and never check their
health
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 in hospital or even just go for vacation to get a fresh air. Due to
this
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, people are getting sick more easily and reduce the
health
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 standard in the country.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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