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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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One of the most difficult threats related to the environment in the current time is the rising of ocean levels provoked by the global warming. Among the problems generated by
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 life unbalance due to the warming of
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 waters and the destruction of villages and cities at the
sea
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level
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. Only the compromise of the whole planet with the environment cause can reduce the effects of
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 problem. The balance of the life under the ocean water involves
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complex
 systems connected all over the world.
Sea
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 animals and plants have a total harmonic life that depends on the natural and normal temperature of
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 water to continue to exist. The global warming causes the heat of the ocean
waters making
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waters, making
 it unbearable for most of the species
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 lion which lives in freezing waters.
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Another
 problem that affects humans more directly is the overflow of entire villages and even cities set down at the
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. With the rise of the
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 some places can disappear, and entire populations can lose their place to live.
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 threat has already been faced by many cities near to the Atlantic
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 as Conceição
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 Barra in the state of Espirito Santo in Brazil. In conclusion, elevation of the
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 has been proven how important it is for the humans to take
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action
 against the global warming compromising themselves to the environment causes
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 species and people can be seriously damaged.
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