The chart below shows the annual water usage by different industries.

The chart below shows the annual water usage by different industries.
The bar chart compares seven different industries in terms of utilizing
water
from
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and public supply in a year.
Overall
, it can be seen that
chemical
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industry has by far the highest
amount
of the two
water
supplies.
Fuel
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' industry jas
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registered
the lowest records. Looking at the chart in more
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,
it is clear that
chemical
manufature
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manufacture
is used almost
more
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double
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of
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water
than paper and metal
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manufacture
, 430 of
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water
and 240 from
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supply. The figure for metal was 240,
whereas
paper industries
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almost less than that number by a fifth, Food/drink
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for just over a hundred of
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groundwater
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water
.
Also
, the industries of fuel and textiles record fairly similar
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, at 70 and 80
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respectively
,
while
the lowest
amount
is used for
machinary
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machinery
purpos
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purposes
.
Water
that
come
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from
water
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the water
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supply has higher
utilize
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in chemical and food/drink and around 240 and 190 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, ground, amount with synonyms.
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