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The chart below shows the annual water usage by different industries.

The chart below shows the annual water usage by different industries.
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The bar chart compares seven different industries in terms of utilizing
water
 from
ground
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the ground
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 and public supply in a year.
Overall
, it can be seen that
chemical
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the chemical
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 industry has by far the highest
amount
 of the two
water
 supplies.
Fuel
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The fuel
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' industry jas
registed
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registered
 the lowest records. Looking at the chart in more
details
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detail
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,
it is clear that
 chemical
manufature
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manufacture
 is used almost
more
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apply
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double
amount
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the amount
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 of
ground
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groundwater
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water
 than paper and metal
manufature
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manufacture
, 430 of
ground
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groundwater
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water
 and 240 from
public
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the public
a public
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 supply. The figure for metal was 240,
whereas
 paper industries
has
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 almost less than that number by a fifth, Food/drink
account
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accounts
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 for just over a hundred of
ground
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groundwater
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water
.
Also
, the industries of fuel and textiles record fairly similar
amount
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amounts
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, at 70 and 80
respectivly
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respectively
,
while
 the lowest
amount
 is used for
machinary
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machinery
purpos
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purposes
.
Water
 that
come
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comes
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 from
water
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the water
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 supply has higher
utilize
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utilisation
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 in chemical and food/drink and around 240 and 190 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, ground, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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