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The dangers and complexities of modern world have made mobile phone an absolute neccessity forchildren. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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In present scenario, the mobile
phone
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 has become an integral part of human life. It has
also
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 been influenced the children to a greater extent, and people are considered it as a necessary device for them to tackle the complex and
danger
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dangerous
 situations.
However
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, I don not agree with the aforementioned statement.
This
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 essay would aim to justify my viewpoint in the subsequent fragments. To commence with, children spend most of their time on mobile
phone
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 just to play games and surfing social network sites, which are
sheer wastage
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a sheer waste
sheer waste
 of their time, because childhood is the period to shape their lives.
Although
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, mobiles are taken as a gadget in order to access information with the help of
internet
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the internet
, but computers are available in the school libraries for them, where access to information is available just a click away.
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 to
this
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, despite having
number
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a number
 of advantages, young age
can not
can not
cannot
 be considered as
a
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an
 appropriate use to own a
cellphone
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cell phone
, as at
young age
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a young age
, wards are not be able to judge the things, which are fruitful for them or not.
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, children can be easily provoked by the porn websites and vulgar advertisements, which may put their energy and time in
wrong direction
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the wrong direction
.
Besides
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this
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, by spending several hours on
internet
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the internet
 and playing games on
mobile
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mobile phones
phone
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, they may become addicted to it, which
further
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effect
have an effect upon
affect
 their health.
Therefore
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, unnecessary use of mobile
phone
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 can make children vulnerable. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
desite
regardless of, in defiance of
despite
 having various advantages of
phone
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, children may not be allowed by their parents to have their own mobiles, and there are various other ways to protect a child from the unusual situations.
Nevertheless
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, parents should take the responsibility of their children by providing them secure environment.
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