Some people say that all young people should have full-time education until they are 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that education for youngsters is a controversial issue in many countries. The debate focuses on the necessity of offering full time teaching for students before reaching the age of majority. While I accept some benefits

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trend offers, I do not consider that students should study full-time. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why children who are less than 18 years old should study full-time at school.

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, full-time education allows young people broaden their own knowledge about different fields through a wide range of subjects

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as math, literature or history.

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, basic knowledge will help a group of student fulfils essential skills which will serve in the future and give them countless opportunities to solve the complex problems in daily life.

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, teenagers have more tendency to develop violent behaviour because they witness frequently violent act through the internet or games.

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, young children will more likely to turn into crimes, causing the damaging effect on the society so studying full-time may reduce their time wasted on these doings and

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lessen the burden for the society.

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, I disagree that teenagers should be required to study full-time. One reason is that the incredible pressure of studying at school accounts for a great deal of how teenagers's spend their time so they easily suffer from stress and depression.

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, children in many developed countries like Korean or Japan become mentally disordered or have the nervous breakdown because they have to complete a large number of assignments. Another important factor is that adolescents should be encouraged to watch some kinds of TV shows which not only relax under pressure on homework but

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develop their practical skills.

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can bring positive impact on studying at school. In conclusion, it seems to me that young learners should balance their timetable by taking part in outdoor activities rather than studying day by day.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

325 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

comprehensive education
intellectual growth
emotional growth
social growth
evolving job market
specialized knowledge
extended education
reducing inequality
essential competencies
vocational training
economic impact
financial constraints
infrastructure
stress and burnout
personal aspirations
career aspirations

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Some people say that all young people should have full-time education until they are 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

‏There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in fighting out about the history of the gouse or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

some people beleive that it is important to keep the home and the work place tidy and organized. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view.