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I am writing to refer Mr. Taylor, a 38-year-old gardener, who has been suffering from chronic left
knee
pain
.
According to
 the new MRI, findings show damaged meniscal cartilage, he requires your urgent evaluation for any need for meniscal repairmen.
Mr.
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 Taylor’s problem
has been
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started
since
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nine
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 9 months back after twisting his
knee
 in a tennis game. In the beginning, the
pain
 was manageable with some painkillers. He came 6 months after the injury in August, with left
knee
pain
 and local tenderness on the medial joint line. The X-ray was normal and he was requested to take NSAID and advised to get a review in the clinic if there is no improvement. After 3 months, he came again today
while
 he was limping. He still had
pain
 and swelling in his left
knee
. He was concerned the injury was inhibiting his productive work and he worried about that. Related to
this
 chronic resistant
pain
 in the left
knee
 MRI was done. The report showed us a damaged meniscal cartilage. I would appreciate it if you could visit Mr. Taylor for any surgical repair and removal of the damaged meniscus. Yours sincerely, Doctor,
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coherence cohesion
For further improvement, include a brief mention of previous treatments applied before referring to MRI findings to support the progression narrative more smoothly.
task achievement
Including patient’s response to initial treatments could enhance the task response by demonstrating the necessity of referral.
logical structure
The letter maintains a clear and logical structure, effectively guiding the reader through the patient’s history, current condition, and your referral request.
suitable writing tone
The use of a professional tone throughout the letter appropriately matches the task requirement, showing respect and concern for the patient's condition.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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