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Some people think visitors to others countries should imitate local customers and behaviours. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.

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Tourism helps to bring many cultures of the world all together. Some people believe that the tourists should copy the public and their behaviours; whereas, some people think that a
country
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 should welcome diverse cultures.
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 essay will discuss both the views and provide evidence as to why we should greet different cultures. Every person has a different personality;
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, every
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 has its unique attributes. Imitating the
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, behaviour, habits of various tourists can lead to the demolishing of their own individuality, race, custom and history of their provenance. If the visitors start simulating the local public
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 there would be no virtues and traditions left of their own nation. People coming from various countries bring different cultures to the place. Every
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 should respect the diversity of
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 and greet them and accept them how they are.
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 is the only thing that binds the countrymen together. The varied
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 leads to shaping of the society, and keeping the values of the provenance alive.
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, we should always welcome the differences of other countrymen. To conclude, welcoming the guests and their diverse backgrounds and lifestyle is different and copying them and applying them to ourselves is a separate thing.
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, imitating the
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 or the behaviour of other countries will not lead a
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 anywhere.
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 why, each and every nation should welcome the diversity of cast,
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, race of distinctive countries.
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 will help our own
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 grow not only financially, but
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 expand out in development in every way.
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