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Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people believe that teamwork or group
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 can gain immense essential skills than those
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 are done solely. I strongly agree with
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 view, as voluntary
service
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 not only fosters essential life skills but
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 prepares
students
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 academically and psychologically for future challenges.
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, one compelling reason for supporting compulsory volunteering is that it plays a vital role in developing
students
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’ cognitive and emotional abilities. Activities
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 as healthcare assistance, childcare, and participation in welfare programmes expose
students
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 to real-life situations that demand empathy, problem-solving, and adaptability. Through
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 experiences, young people learn how to cope with unpredictable circumstances and work effectively with individuals from diverse backgrounds.
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, a study conducted in China revealed that
students
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 involved in welfare programmes supporting people with disabilities demonstrated significantly higher tolerance and emotional resilience.
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,
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 clearly illustrates that social
service
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 contributes to strengthening
students
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’ mental and emotional maturity.
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, another important advantage of coordination is its positive impact on academic progression. In many regions,
students
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 who actively participate in community
service
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 are rewarded with additional academic credits or recognition, which can be beneficial for higher education prospects.
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, in Kerala, several universities encourage student participation in programmes
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 as the National
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 Scheme (NSS) and the Additional Skill Acquisition Programme (ASAP). These initiatives not only enhance practical experience but
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 provide academic incentives, thereby motivating
students
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 to contribute meaningfully to society
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 improving their chances of admission to higher studies. In conclusion, making
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works
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 benefits both individuals and society. It equips
students
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 with essential cognitive and emotional
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abilities
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while
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also
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 supporting their academic advancement, making it a valuable and necessary component of modern education systems.

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language
Use clear and simple words. Some lines are long and hard to read.
task
Make your main view clear in every paragraph.
coherence
Link ideas with small connect words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'therefore'.
grammar
Check grammar and form in each paragraph.
content
You state your view clearly.
content
You use real examples from different places (China, Kerala).
structure
Your essay has a clear shape with intro, body and conclusion.
content
Two main ideas cover life skills and study gains.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication skills
  • problem-solving
  • collaboration
  • conflict resolution
  • leadership
  • accountability
  • social connections
  • networks
  • adaptability
  • empathy
  • diverse personalities
  • real-world environments
  • team dynamics
  • group cohesion
  • interpersonal skills
  • delegation
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