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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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College life is
one
 of the best
life
Suggestion
live
 where you can learn lots of things which help you
further
 in life. It is commonly believed
that is
 essential for high school students to live outside their parental habitations. I strongly believe in
this
 argument.
This
 essay
further
 discusses the idea of independence living briefly and identify how maturity will increase or decrease. On
one
 hand, college students who are largely isolated, learn some positive social values when they are started living outside their parent scope.
Firstly
, students are able to socialize with other fellows from different backgrounds;
hence
, they adopt some positive social values, their customs and traditions which help them in near future.
In addition
, they will be able to deal with all of their problems especially financial issues efficiently.
For instance
,
one
student
 who visit abroad and it only have a certain amount as a living allowance, so it will learn how to live independently outside their comfort zone with limited resources.
On the contrary
, the potential set-backs are not so far.
To begin
 with,
student
 lose their focus on studies when there are living in their dormitories. To
further
 explain, students who living outside their parents watch hardly concentrate due to low moral
support
.
This
 form of lure is usually augmented by their peers, who are almost there to help, and
also
 guide them in every aspects
therefore
, they are easily convinced.
For example
,
one
 of my friends who go abroad for study has a nervous breakdown due to no moral
support
. There is no
one
 for its guidance and assure him at the time of high pressure due to studies. In the absence of parental
support
, most students lose self-esteem since they need
this
 form of
support
 to study effectively. In conclusion, their intercultural ethical maturity, high school
student
 gain outside their parental home;
nevertheless
, there may be a devastating impact on the
student
's attention to studies as well as the overall moral to learn.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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