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There is increase of noise in our daily lives nowadays. Why is this a problem? What can be done to reduce it?

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Noise levels are gradually on the increase due developments in countries. Villages becoming towns and towns becoming cities, thereby, increasing the volume of
sound
 related activities in the environment. Entertainment, religious activities, industrial activities and
construction
 works are few of the daily increased volume which we encounter. By having an increased
activities
Suggestion
activity
 in the noise
level
, our concentration levels
begins
Suggestion
begin
 to drop.
For example
, schools located in
construction
 areas can be affected. Students who are learning won't be able to concentrate on what they are being taught, rather they will be distracted by the volume of
sound
 coming from different angles on the
construction
 site.
Also
, in places of work close to major roads, sometimes the distractions of the activities from the main road can be a source of concern to people working in
such
 an environment. The constant movement of cars, horns and sounds from car exhaust can reduce their
level
 of concentration. Another issue with increased
sound
 has to do with Industries close to the city. The
level
 of pollution generated by the machines used in these industries
are
Suggestion
is
 at the
level
 which humans can't cope with, as sometimes it has health implications for humans, most times in the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
 part of the human life if not now. Government regulation can be used to reduce the problem in terms of ensuring
construction
 companies are located in areas designated for
such
 and regulating the
level
 of
sound
 originating from the location. Ensuring that
buidings
a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place
buildings
 which are built for specific purposes are not turned around after
sometime
Suggestion
some time
. By ensuring housing authorities in charge of supervising
construction
 works should ensure that machinery and equipment used in sites adhere to minimal
sound
 levels. With
minimal
Suggestion
a minimal sound level
sound
level
, we all as human can live
an
Suggestion
a
 healthy life in a peaceful, calm and serene environment.
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