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In developing countries, some people believe that governments should give people access to new technology in order to improve their lives, while others think governments should offer free education. Discuss both ideas and give your own opinion.

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Governments, either developed or developing countries, are responsible for improving lives of their people,
however people
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however, people
has contrasting
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are contrasting
were contrasting
 views about the method. Some people think that
government
 should provide more resources in introducing new technology, other think that
government
 should put more resources to ensure the free
education
 for its people. I agree that
access
 and introduction of technologies are
import
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imported
 to
better life style
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a better lifestyle
better lifestyle
,
however
 I strongly believe that provision of free
education
 should be
utmost priority
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the utmost priority
 of any
government
. Introduction
for
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of
 new technologies can save time;
for example
, online application system for submission for tax return can help people to avoid unnecessary
paper work
work that involves handling papers: forms or letters or reports etc.
paperwork
 and trips to tax office.
the
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The
 advance technological metropolitan travel system with
advance payment method
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an advance payment method
 can avoid the long queue and save time for more productive activities. The
inter net
a computer network consisting of a worldwide network of computer networks that use the TCP/IP network protocols to facilitate data transmission and exchange
internet
 had made
this
 world a global village, easy
access
 to These resources can help the people
to get
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get
 advances of
this
 globalization,
for instance
, any one in
developing country
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developing countries
a developing country
 can sell his product to rest of the world through online sales.
Although
access
 to new technologies has many benefits, but no one can use these technologies without knowledge,
therefore
, knowledge is the
first
 priority. If
government
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the government
 has
policy
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a policy
 of free
education
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education, then
then
 more people will be able to get new knowledge about new things,
for instance
, more student can select the computer, information and software degree, which result in development and right use of the technologies.
Further
 free
education
 will provide the opportunities to excel in other areas of science and life that will result in balance economy with rich culture and recreation heritage.
in
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In
 conclusion,
access
 to new technologies can bring ease to people's lives of any country,
however in
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however, in
 developing country
access
 to free
education
 is more desirable for
growing economy
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a growing economy
 and developing the nation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • catalyze
  • economic growth
  • healthcare systems
  • digital divide
  • socio-economic gaps
  • e-waste
  • fundamental right
  • uplifts communities
  • skilled workforce
  • gender equality
  • social justice
  • sustainability
  • job creation
  • access to information
  • balanced approach
  • skill-based learning
  • sequential approach
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