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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Certain Persons
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
belief
 that youth
time
 is the best in the
everyones
all people
everyone
 lives
,
Accept space
,
 but same
time
 additional people thought is adult journey is brought more joyful because of more responsibilities. I will argue that teenage
life
 is the most happiest due to several reasons.
Firstly
, nowadays due to globalization younger
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 have
lot
Suggestion
lots
 of
time
 to explore many things in their age compare to others because they have a free
time
 for travel, studies and enjoy with friends, on top of that teenage is
happiest
Suggestion
the happiest life
life
 because of no
responsibility
 and no one depend on them
hence
 their
life
 is
blessful
completely happy and contented
blissful
blissfully
 to enjoy.
For Example
,
Accept space
,
 As per latest CNN survey
in
Suggestion
with
of
 worldwide young people are spending more money
in
Suggestion
on
 travel and all of the
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 are
univeristy
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
 kids. On the
otherhand
Suggestion
other hand
, Mainly, adults have more
responsibility
 compare with
childerns
 because they are busy with work and personal schedules
therefore
 they don't have
to
Suggestion
time to enjoy the
the time to enjoy
time
 enjoy the
life
.
Accept space
.
In addition
 that
,
Accept space
,
 they have to think about their
childerns
 future
endovers
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavours
end overs
, so that
time
 will pass. In
Next
, some adults look
thir
appropriate to; intended for
for
 enjoyment in family
responsibility
 like
kids
Suggestion
kids'
 studies and their future
.
Accept space
.
For Instance
,
Accept space
,
 For some of the developing countries like India and Brazil most of the elders think
for
Suggestion
about
 their kids future in spite of them,
what ever
one or some or every or all without specification
whatever
 they are earning in their salary
,
Accept space
,
 keep some amount
to
Suggestion
of
 kids. In conclusion, some people thought that college students are enjoying their
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
 rather than adults because they don't have any
responsibility
, but married persons
also
 enjoy with their
life
 in
different way
Suggestion
different ways
a different way
 like kids
responsibility
 and other things. I have argued that youth will more enjoy better than to seniors because they have got very free
time
 to explore new thing in worldwide and most of the
time
 they can spend with
they
of them or themselves
their
 loved
onces
used of a single unit or thing; not two or more
ones
.
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