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Write an essay to an educated reader to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using public transport.Include reasons and any revalant to support your answer.

At present
,
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,
 many nations are
supporting to public
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supporting the public transport system
supporting to the public transport system
transport
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system
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 rather than
indivisual
a human being
individual
 travel in all major cities.
They
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Their
 are several advantages of
this
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,
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,
 but same time worth to discuss about disadvantages
also
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.
Firstly
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, nowadays all the major and developing
countires
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 are supporting to increase transit
system
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 in many ways like bus and train because of
this
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 people will travel any place to very less charge
therefore
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 it's
benefit
Suggestion
beneficial
 to government and citizens.
In
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addition that
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addition, that
 public will reach their places with safety and fast.
Secondly
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,
Environment
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Environmentally
 friendly
,
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,
 all the major cities are facing
pollucation issue
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publication issues
publication issue
 because of more
indivisual
a human being
individual
transport
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, if public
transport
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 increased automatically personal
vechiles
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
 reduced
hence
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 it's
benefit
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a benefit
 to
environment
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the environment
.
For Example
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,
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,
 In As per the latest CNN survey In Toronto
pollucation
a copy of a printed work offered for distribution
publication
 got decreased for
last
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 three years because of most of the city is covered by metro and all are
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
entrusted
 to use. On the
Otherhand
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Other hand
, metro will not come on time
therefore
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 many
employess
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
 will not reach to
office
Suggestion
the office
 in time, on top of
that most
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that, most
of rails are
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rails are
 always crowded
hence
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 humans will face many health
issue
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issues
in different session
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in a different session
.
Next
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,
out side
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
 of the
cities people
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cities, people
 can't travel on due to long distance
transport
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system
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 is to costly for build.
For Instance
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,
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,
 all the developing countries are facing financial problem because of
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transport
Suggestion
the transport system
system
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 is
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 costly to build in
out side
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
 of the city. In Conclusion, due to
public
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the public transport system
transport
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system
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 they are several benefits are there like cost less and public can reach their place safely, another thing is
pollucation
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 will decrease in the city. Other side is public will suffer with health issue due to in crowded place more
decease
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
 will come fast.

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