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More and more developing are expanding their tourist industries. Why is this? Is it a positive development?

Advance countries are focusing and extending their
tourist
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 industries over and over. Nowadays, there are no secrets that the vast majority of countries redirected their views to the
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 due to
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sector
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 brings significant money to overseas budget.
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,
tourism
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 has some key factors which will increase the amount of visitors to the overseas or decrease. These days, clearly evident that
tourist
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sector
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 can get top place in the list where economy develop because of
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 and due to the amount of people who come to see the
country
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.
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, developing
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 in the
country
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 opens variety work place for them who cannot find a job. Developing overseas,
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 as Turkey, Thailand, Egypt focuses more and more,
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 the majority of income comes from
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 into
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 budget.
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, how
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 choose convenient
country
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 for a holiday, what criteria and requirement should be covered. In my point of view, that condition and services are crucial for human. If countries do not demonstrate good services and condition those countries will not get rely from
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.
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,
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sector
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 can bring potentially grow up in education facilities. Local people can get change to improve knowledge, language due to flow
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 to international tourists.
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, people start to focus learning languages for getting nice job. In conclusion,
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 industries provide many advantages as for countries as for local people.
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, if humans will use current
sector
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 for right way the economy of the countries will be increased dramatically and have reached top developed countries in the world.

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