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Write about the following topic: Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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There is an ongoing debate regarding paying
taxes
.
While
 some people argue that they should possess all the money they earn without paying
taxes
 to the government, I believe that citizens should pay
taxes
 considering the benefits of society.
This
 essay will discuss my opinion in detail with relevant examples.
To begin
 with, income is needed for countries to provide free facilities to people.
That is
 to say that the government is providing free access to amenities
such
 as healthcare and education to their civilians and they indeed need money to pay for the workers in public services in order to maintain the well-being of society.
Such
 services cannot be provided without taxing the income professionals.
For instance
, developed countries like the United States and Canada are taxing an average of 18% to 20% of their citizen's salaries as it is reasonable because the policymakers cannot always rely on the support of other countries.
Additionally
, if the masses are not paying
taxes
, it would contribute a huge burden to the state budget.
In other words
, authorities do not have a significant source of income to manage their budget
while
 providing
such
 free facilities to their countrymen.
Therefore
, they are pushed into a situation to continuously seek financial aid from wealthy nations which leads to a financial crisis.
For example
, India introduced a taxation policy in 1890 after they were impacted by a huge economic downturn. In conclusion,
although
 some proponents argue that people should refrain from paying
taxes
, I believe that citizens should pay at least a certain percentage of their salary to the state for the services they use
as well as
 to balance the budget for societal benefits.
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Task Achievement
For Task Achievement, ensure that your position is clear throughout the response. Your opinion should be stated in the introduction and consistently maintained. Make certain that all parts of the task are addressed, including a discussion of both sides of the argument, with clear and comprehensive ideas and a conclusion that reflects your opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
When considering Coherence and Cohesion, your essay should logically organize ideas and information. Paragraphs should be well-structured with clear topic sentences. Use linking words and cohesive devices effectively to connect ideas within and between paragraphs, but avoid overusing them, which can make the text seem mechanical.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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