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Many people believe,humen health standards is going to fail in the future.Do you agree or disagree this statement.

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There is no doubt that the number of new diseases is increasing day by day.
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 is often argued that human's
health
 status would be lowered in coming years, in my opinion,
however
, I firmly believe that as medical technology has been evolving for the
last
 two centuries, people have better
health
 level compared to previous days. One of the main reason to think in that way is that preventive aspect of the care system.
In other words
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by administering vaccinations and immunizations to the vulnerable groups, would reduce the chances of spreading infection among these groups
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,
once
this
 was plagued the planet earth in a devastated condition by deadly diseases. Take polio as an from some for a long period of time
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but
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since scientists have found appropriate vaccines for the same, have reduced physical disabilities resulted from these diseases. Another obvious point is to consider is that nowadays, early diagnosis and treatment facilities are innumerous.Most of the countries in the world offer free medical treatment to its citizens
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due to which public seeks medial interventions whenever they feel something unusual with their body.
This
,
therefore
, diagnoses diseases at the beginning stage itself eventually, enhances the chances of recovery higher than later stage treatments.Cancer,
for instance
, which was once incurable ailments
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currently,
this
 is under controlled and life expectancy of these patients is tremendously hiked since they have offered advanced treatment modalities.So under no circumstances it is naive to think that
health
 standards deteriorate. By way of conclusion, even though some think that society is going to see the worst standard of mankind
health
 status, I completely oppose
this
 concept because of the latest advancement in the field of medical. It is
predicated
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predicted
 that in coming future not only improve people heath but longevity
also
 by science.
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